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Friday, 8 November 2013

My Story Review By Fraser

Giving it a shot
WALT:We are learning to write a story Review
by David Tulloch

This story is about a girl named Lauren. She is lazy because all she does is sit down on her couch and start eating biscuits. Lauren  represented her school by taking part in Shot Put. She beat all her friends and even the older students at her school.

She was the best because she had lots of strength in her arms and muscles and her bones were as tough as a rock.She was  unbeatable and everyone said that she was unbeatable.

The characters in this story where Lauren,Nina,dad,the school students and mum.This story took place at Lauren’s school. I liked this story because it was about giving it a shot at different types of sports.


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