My Story Review By Fraser

Giving it a shot

WALT:We are learning to write a story Review

by David Tulloch

This story is about a girl named Lauren. She is lazy because all she does is sit down on her couch and start eating biscuits. Lauren  represented her school by taking part in Shot Put. She beat all her friends and even the older students at her school.

She was the best because she had lots of strength in her arms and muscles and her bones were as tough as a rock.She was  unbeatable and everyone said that she was unbeatable.

The characters in this story where Lauren,Nina,dad,the school students and mum.This story took place at Lauren’s school. I liked this story because it was about giving it a shot at different types of sports.

Story Review

A Piece of Paradise by Leone Thorpe

 This story is about two Gods called the Rain God and the Sun God. The Sun God and the Rain God were arguing because they wanted to see whose plants grew bigger. When it was the end of the season they both gave up because all the crops needed some sunshine and some rain so they agreed that they needed help from each other to grow their food.

 The characters in this story are the Sun God and the Rain God. This story takes place in a faraway village.I liked this story because it was about helping people and helping the environment.

Fraser's Story Reveiw

Title: Mahina-a-rangi’s Perfume

Author:Rawiri Piripi  

WALT review stories we read

The story is about a warrior called Turongo who went to kahungunu district. Many women in the district including Mahina-a-rangi were smitten by his good looks. Mahina’s rangi’s father admired Turongo’s good looks,  his hunting and planting skills. The characters in the story are Turongo, Mahina-a-rangi’s Dad and Mahina-a-rangi. The story takes place at a place called Kahungunu district. I liked this story because it is about a legend called Turongo.

Fraser's Story Reveiwv

Title: Beetles

Author: Philippa Werry

The story is about a boy called Sam. One day when it was raining and Sam brought a log inside the house and told them that there was a beetle on the log. His brother Matt couldn't see the beetle at first but then he saw something brown move from the log and then he could see the beetle.

Sam's dad came into the house, saw the beetle and told them that it was called a huhu beetle. Sam’s Dad said they have really bad nips when they are cross. The characters in the story are a boy called Sam, his brother Matt, Phoebe and Sam's Dad.

The story takes place in a tramping house. I liked this story because the Author put in nice, powerful, interesting and exciting words.

Mighty Muscles

The Article  is about your muscles and how you could keep them safe and healthy.To prevent injures you need to do exercise before playing games. 

How do muscles work ? Muscles pull your bones to make different parts of your body move.

How do cramps happen ? Cramps happen when muscles are tightly contracted.

I like this Article because it shows what you need to keep your muscles safe and healthy and it helps me to learn more about the different parts of my body.

Bean Rock Story Review

Title:Bean Rock

Author: Philippa Werry

This article is about The story is about  Bean Rock lighthouse, the keeper and the legend behind it. The characters in this story are Huge Brown, James Anderson, The lighthouse keeper, Elvin, John Wheeler, Edward R. Williams, Alexander, William Colley and Frederick Woodbury. This Article takes place at an old lighthouse in the middle of the sea. I liked this Article because it is about the olden days.